Comments on A Memoir of Demons & Angels

[Bri]

What can I say, this is a very good start on your story.

 

And yes, one with a tiefling and aasimar heritage would certianly be an outsider.

 

You did a commendable job tying Duncan and Daeghun with Amara's mother in the first chapter.

 

And yes, I especially liked this small aside:

But it comforted me to think that if I could not be beautiful, I would settle on being powerful, fierce, and widely feared.

 

...Once I got shoes.

[Raenemon]

Ha, ha.

 

Adventuring is all about the footwear.

 

[Arker]

Brings tears of joy to my eyes at the thought of Bishop at the end of chapter 7. When I go through OC, I always have to fight him and Qara-Spoiler. Given I would have killed him just to mute him.

[Raenemon]

Brings tears of joy to my eyes at the thought of Bishop at the end of chapter 7. When I go through OC, I always have to fight him and Qara-Spoiler. Given I would have killed him just to mute him.

 

 

That was the reaction I was hoping for. It's hard to lower Bishop to levels of depravity and deviousness that hasn't been done before, but I like a challenge.

 

 

So please, keep the comments coming.

[Raenemon]

I've been doing some editing of previous chapters, but I could edit all day...

 

I keep re-visiting the ending I've written (as in what happens through the re-working of the OC and MOB). It would be nice to know what sort of lose ends from these campaigns people would like to see 're-knotted.'

 

For example, I've already made a revived Cormick the main squeeze for Amara and gave him a meatier role in the OC. I did that in part because such a big deal of Cormick is made in the Tutorial, but then he just disappears---poof. Realistically, if he was ever a threat to Lorne, he has to have something...like a smile, a wit, and a way with people (and a greatsword). And I love the fact that in the OC he seems to be worshipped in West Harbor, while the PC isn't . That's just great writing!

 

The original romantic interests are there, but well, a bit more complex. With Cormick, that was like creating a new character, so I enjoyed doing what I liked with him. With Bishop and Casavir, well, almost every lady who's played the game has rather strong feeling for/against both of those fellows; there's a fanfic for every romantic inclination. I'm 'Bishop's Romance' made the relationship with Bishop appealing, but Casavir, the one I imagined, got his own points of interest...I like writing both of them. I hope my depiction of them is unique. And...I hope people who like/hate both with still find surprises.

 

For other companions, I haven't wanted to re-invent the wheel too much. The Khelgar I depict is not very different from the OC because I already fell in love with him the first time I played the game. I don't do anything really with Elanee, Qara, and Grobnar because frankly, I didn't interact with them in the game, and so I haven't had the energy to re-interpret them in the story. Yet I have enjoyed re-visiting Esmerelle, Daeghan, Duncan, Shandra, Nevalle, Neeshka, Sand, Torio, Ammon, and some others (you'll see them later on).

[Raenemon]

Here are some screenshots to whet your visual appetite.

 

 

 

http://i810.photobucket.com/albums/zz22/Ra...maraCormick.jpg

 

http://i810.photobucket.com/albums/zz22/Ra...AMarapoints.jpg

 

 

 

 

 

Check out some more screenshots of Amara and the gang at this link:

 

http://s810.photobucket.com/albums/zz22/Ra...20and%20Angels/